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Frak It All
Mar. 1st, 2006 02:59 pmI'm currently proofing the stories we're workshopping in class tonight, and I was going to be polite because these people were going to be reading my story next week and I wanted them to have nice, non-rippy to shreds feelings about it. But I'm halfway through the third one and FRAK THAT.
Everything is 'real quiet' or 'real close' and it's getting on my last nerve, and there are comma splices all over the damn place, and that's not even with Japan-obsessed boy's story set in the Tokyo airport with its fanboy Japanese and GACKT CAMEO, or the incredibly rambly disconnected middle-aged woman story (I swear, it reads more like she's senile). The third story is okay, except that the author is obsessed with getting in EVERY TINY DETAIL of description (model and year of cars, exactly where someone's boyfriend works--when we're talking businessman chatting up random waitress in restaurant) and she has far too great a love affair with the semicolon. I love the semicolon; don't get me wrong. I feel it is the most underutilized piece of punctuation in America. But she used up her quota for the freakin' year in the FIRST TWO PAGES.
GAH!
I wish I had a red pen to do this with. I really do.
Everything is 'real quiet' or 'real close' and it's getting on my last nerve, and there are comma splices all over the damn place, and that's not even with Japan-obsessed boy's story set in the Tokyo airport with its fanboy Japanese and GACKT CAMEO, or the incredibly rambly disconnected middle-aged woman story (I swear, it reads more like she's senile). The third story is okay, except that the author is obsessed with getting in EVERY TINY DETAIL of description (model and year of cars, exactly where someone's boyfriend works--when we're talking businessman chatting up random waitress in restaurant) and she has far too great a love affair with the semicolon. I love the semicolon; don't get me wrong. I feel it is the most underutilized piece of punctuation in America. But she used up her quota for the freakin' year in the FIRST TWO PAGES.
GAH!
I wish I had a red pen to do this with. I really do.
